Well thanks to the crits (thanks Janne and LDahl and everybody who commented!) I worked up the image some more. I got rid of the 2d birds and organised a flock of real Ravens to invade the artist's mind. Plus a few skulls to represent 'you know what". And some sparkles (where oh where would we, to be lost beside the sea, in darkness, to be sparkle-less ?)
Below is the full page set up. Thanks for looking! Both images are quite large so if you'd like detail please click for big!